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The silent killer, 
the thief of your final breath,
Sun's worst enemy. 
HAIKUWRIMO: Day 10

It's really cold outside. Thought I should write about nature for once, but I don't know if this counts. 

Enjoy!:iconfeelingfreeplz:
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AussieDidge Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

Phew, it’s been a few days since I favourited this piece, but I’m ready to give it a look…

 

As a simple haiku, one with a 5/7/5 syllable form, let me say you’ve nailed it. I firmly believe in the words you’re trying to communicate, having had a stint in Alaska for a few months and experiencing sub-zero temperatures for a time.

 

I know the feeling of having your insides seem to freeze up inside of you, having your breath sharply taken from you like a vacuum and being completely out of the sun’s great warmth. TL;DR: It absolutely sucks. =p

 

You’ll probably say and mean more in twelve words than many writers will in a lifetime of publishing. For that, I must say a splendid work of poetry, and have this high rating with my blessing. Keep it up! :clap:

 

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starlightt1234 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thanks so much for the feedback, really appreciate it! :flirty:
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AussieDidge Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You betcha! :thumbsup:;)
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this reminds me of Call of The Wild, how the cold hated movement and would do anything to stop it.
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starlightt1234 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i'm a little embarrassed, i've never read Call of The Wild before. ^^; but was it a good book?
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
oh it's fine, it's an AMAZING book. if you ever get the chance you should definitely read it! :D (Big Grin) 
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starlightt1234 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
alright, thanks for the suggestion! :D
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Professional Writer
A powerfully tribute to winter. A great write.

Regards,
John.
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starlightt1234 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!:icondancekittyplz:
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Professional Writer
:)
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